Shanon's Nurse(ry) Station

For all of the canon Omutsu Senshi stuff

Hmm, maybe we could flesh out that script of yours here. You were saying you wanted to change a few things, right?

Yup yup

Woot! =3

... hmm, maybe you should post the script, give us something to work with and knitpick at. Then we can figure out what to do to fix it, and how to work the different elements we've added and such into it.

OmutuSenshi (Working title) Issue 1

Page 1
Panel One: Deep Space, slight movement in the background
Panel Two: Zoomed in, revealing a space station of a vaguely phallic design
Panel Three: Inside, 5 capsules, one broken, 4 closed
Panel 4: (takes up bottom of the page) Three Capsules open, side by side. Figures within obscured by mist, although all have rather pronounced chests

Page 2
Panel One: (takes up a third of the page): close up of first figure, had a D-Cup breast size. Dressed in just some ropes which cover the nipples and vaginal area, has various bondage items connected to the ropes
Panel Two: (takes up a third of the page) close up of second figure, DD-Cup breast size. Figure is wearing leather dominatrix outfit, leather whip wrapped around her diagonally, frizzed hair
Panel Three: (takes up remainder of the page) close up of third form, has a larger chest than the other two. Has a animalistic looking body, holding what looks like a fake animal head/mask

Page 3
Full Page: Backview of them standing before the last capsule which remains unopened

Page 4
Panel One: A computer suddenly blinks
Panel Two: Close up of the computer screen:
Panel Three: Profile shot of the first person “Licorice the Bondage”
Panel Four: Profile shot of second person: “Tequila the Sadist”
Panel Five: Profile shot of the third person: “Veal the Fur”
Panel Six: (rest of page, text on comp screen) “If you are reading this, it means we have finally found a planet for our use. If I have not awakened yet, it means the energy reserves have dropped too low to revive me at this time”

Page 5:
Panel One: “If this is the case, the only one who can restore power to awaken me is the one who ran so many years ago. You therefore have two missions. To convert as many as possible for use by us, and to find that woman. If you fail, pray that I am never revived.”
Panel Two: *all three gulping”
Panel Three: (remainder of page) Shows the ship hovering over the earth

Page 6

Panel One: (top of page) School Building (Edminton Private School, After Hours)
Panel Two: Male student painting (Alex Buchanan , Art Club)
Panel Three: Male student, working on an open computer (Mint Flavored, Tech Club)
Panel Four: A student in a red riding hood esque costume looking over some lines (MJ Avellanet, Theatre Club)
Panel Five: male student in track uniform, stretching (Rikku Hoshi, Football Team)
Panel Six: big haired student, tuning an electric guitar (Owen Penrose, Music Club)

Page 7: Page split into 5 equal parts, showing each often being handed a note

Page 8:
Panel 1: All 5 students reach the nurseâ€s office at the same time.
Panel 2: Looking at each other, Mint looking somewhat curious while the other 4 look slightly annoyed.
Panel 3: view of the door, word bubble “Come in”
Panel 4: door opens, silhouette of the 5 boys
Panel 5: Nurse sitting at her desk, looking at a TV

Page 9:
Panel 1: Alex walks up to the desk “Excuse me, Nurse Shannon, but, why did you…”
Panel 2: finger pressed against his lips “Shh…â€
Panel 3: View of the TV, showing what appears to be a news program
Panel 4: On screen, shows figures that look sort of like the Sailor Senshi and Pretty Cure, enough so readers know who their a parody of, but not enough that we can be sued
Panel 5: Reporter: “Early today, a small ship landed on the outskirts of town. Following normal protocol, Earthâ€s magical girls arrived to thwart these invaders… however…

Page 10: Full page pin up, the 3 aliens standing over the girls, who are almost totally in the nude and engaged in a massive orgy

Page 11:
Panel 1: back at the infirmiry, the boys starring open jawed in shock, Alex, Rikku and Owen sporting erections in their pants
Panel 2: Nurse Shannon: *serious look on her face* Any female that gets close to them instantly becomes hyper sexual, as well as lesbianic.
Panel 3: Nurse Shannon: *slightly sarcastic look* and as you three are showing, most males just have their minds drop to their pants (corer of the panel, SDâ€d/underdrawn version of the 3 sweat dropping)
Panel 4: Mint: uhm, not to interrupt, but, uhm… wat does that have to do with us?
Panel 5: Nurse Shannon: *reaching under desk* simply put, I want you five to fight them
Panel 6: All 5: WHAT?!

Page 12:
Panel 1: *tray on a desk, showing 5 pacifiers*
Panel 2: Nurse Shannon: With these, you can transform into something that can fight them. They also introduce a chemical to your system that will… keep you from being affected by them.
Panel 3: Alex: uhm… no offense, but, uhm, whatâ€s to stop us from just walking out of here, you crazy….
Panel 4: Nurse Shannon: *smug look* You are aware that all extra curricular courses require both the maintaining of a certain GPA and/or a physical. I havenâ€t turned in your physicals yet, and I know a couple of the teachers can be…. Persuaded to fudge a few grades.
Panel 5: All 5: -_- you wouldnâ€t…. Nurse Shannon (off panel, word bubble) wanna try me?
Panel 6: Split panel, showing a hand picking up a pacifier, then putting to mouth*

Page 13:
Full Page Pin-Up, al 5 in OmutuSenshi Outfits, All but Mint looking horrified, Alex screaming “WHAT THE FU…”

End Issue 1 Main Part
Edit/Delete Message

The most obvious is the removal of the orgy

... I dunno, I still find it completely hillarious XD

XD well, if we ca find a way to make it tasteful/drawable....

Is offscreen moaning and some random flying discarded magical girl clothing tasteful? XD

By comparrison? Yes

w00t! =3

Seriously though, if it does bother you, it's cool if we scrap it. *snickers* We could always just save it for the 'Director's Cut'. XD

It's not that I have a problem with it, I'm just trying to figure out how it works into the more "PG-13" rating we've been adjusting it to

Ahhhhh, right right. *nodnods* I see your point there. ^^() Very good then.

Your way might actually be better, it lets it stay withut actually showing it

Alex OmutsuArt
Plush: Bunny
Mint: OmutsuTech
Plush: Foxxy
MJ: OmutsuAct
Plush: Wolfie
Rikku: OmutsuCheer
Plush: Mousie
Owen: OmutsuIdol
Plush: Kitty
Hunter: OmutsuMaid
Plush:
Gwen: OmutsuNinpo
Plush: Froggy
Casey: OmutsuGoth
Plush: Batty

I think Hunter's might've been a panda.

and then there's Lolli, who I forget her Omutsu name, but had a Pedobear-esque plushie, as well as a Shotatron which kept switching plushies

I actually think THAT might've been one of the most screwed up things we've come up with yet. XD

Pedobear sleeper, or Shotatrons?

Both plus Loli. =3

=3 Considering the main villain is basically the fetish of Vore made flesh, that is saying something.

LOL Indeed it is. XD People are gonna think we're nuts if we ever get this done.

=3 indeed. All the more reason to do so

Page 1
Panel One: Deep Space, slight movement in the background
Panel Two: Zoomed in, revealing a space station of a vaguely phallic design
Panel Three: Inside, 5 capsules, one broken, 4 closed
Panel 4: (takes up bottom of the page) Three Capsules open, side by side. Figures within obscured by mist, although all have rather pronounced chests

Page 2
Panel One: (takes up a third of the page): close up of first figure, had a D-Cup breast size. Dressed in just some ropes which cover the nipples and vaginal area, has various bondage items connected to the ropes
Panel Two: (takes up a third of the page) close up of second figure, DD-Cup breast size. Figure is wearing leather dominatrix outfit, leather whip wrapped around her diagonally, frizzed hair
Panel Three: (takes up remainder of the page) close up of third form, has a larger chest than the other two. Has a animalistic looking body, holding what looks like a fake animal head/mask

Page 3
Full Page: Backview of them standing before the last capsule which remains unopened

Page 4
Panel One: A computer suddenly blinks
Panel Two: Close up of the computer screen:
Panel Three: Profile shot of the first person "Licorice the Bondage"
Panel Four: Profile shot of second person: "Tequila the Sadist"
Panel Five: Profile shot of the third person: "Veal the Fur"
Panel Six: (rest of page, text on comp screen) "If you are reading this, it means we have finally found a planet for our use. If I have not awakened yet, it means the energy reserves have dropped too low to revive me at this time"

Page 5:
Panel One: If this is the case, the only one who can restore power to awaken me is the one who ran so many years ago. You therefore have two missions. To convert as many as possible for use by us, and to find that woman. If you fail, pray that I am never revived.
Panel Two: all three gulping
Panel Three: (remainder of page) Shows the ship hovering over the earth

Page 6

Panel One: (top of page) School Building (Edminton Private School, After Hours)
Panel Two: Male student painting (Alex Buchanan , Art Club)
Panel Three: Male student, working on an open computer (Mint Flavored, Tech Club)
Panel Four: A student in a red riding hood esque costume looking over some lines (MJ Avellanet, Theatre Club)
Panel Five: male student in track uniform, stretching (Rikku Hoshi, Football Team)
Panel Six: big haired student, tuning an electric guitar (Owen Penrose, Music Club)

Page 7: Page split into 5 equal parts, showing each often being handed a note

Page 8:
Panel 1: All 5 students reach the nurse's office at the same time.
Panel 2: Looking at each other, Mint looking somewhat curious while the other 4 look slightly annoyed.
Panel 3: view of the door, word bubble "Come in"
Panel 4: door opens, silhouette of the 5 boys
Panel 5: Nurse sitting at her desk, looking at a TV

Page 9:
Panel 1: Alex walks up to the desk "Excuse me, Nurse Shannon, but, why did you..."
Panel 2: finger pressed against his lips "Shh"
Panel 3: View of the TV, showing what appears to be a news program
Panel 4: On screen, shows figures that look sort of like the Sailor Senshi and Pretty Cure, enough so readers know who their a parody of, but not enough that we can be sued
Panel 5: Reporter: "Early today, a small ship landed on the outskirts of town. Following normal protocol, Earth's magical girls arrived to thwart these invaders. However...."

Page 10: Pull panel of the 3 Fetaliens, with moans coming from off screen and various garments being tossed left and right.... Reporter: (off screen, word bubble only) They proved no match... for these... strange invaders.....

Page 11:
Panel 1: back at the infirmiry, the boys starring open jawed in shock, Alex, Rikku and Owen blushing
Panel 2: Nurse Shannon: *serious look on her face* Any female that gets close to them instantly becomes hyper sexual, as well as lesbianic.
Panel 3: Nurse Shannon: *slightly sarcastic look* and as you three are showing, most males get just a bit distracted(corer of the panel, SD'd/underdrawn version of the 3 sweat dropping)
Panel 4: Mint: uhm, not to interrupt, but, uhm, what does that have to do with us?
Panel 5: Nurse Shannon: *reaching under desk* simply put, I want you five to fight them
Panel 6: All 5: WHAT?!

Page 12:
Panel 1: *tray on a desk, showing 5 pacifiers*
Panel 2: Nurse Shannon: With these, you can transform into something that can fight them. They also introduce a chemical and nanomachines to your system that will keep you from being affected by them.
Panel 3: Alex: uhm, no offense, but, uhm, what's to stop us from just walking out of here, you crazy (censored).
Panel 4: Nurse Shannon: *smug look* You are aware that all extra curricular courses require both the maintaining of a certain GPA and/or a physical. I haven't turned in your physicals yet, and I know a couple of the teachers can be…. Persuaded to fudge a few grades.
Panel 5: All 5: -_- you wouldn't... Nurse Shannon: (off panel, word bubble) wanna try me?
Panel 6: Split panel, showing a hand picking up a pacifier, then putting to mouth*

Page 13:
Full Page Pin-Up, al 5 in OmutuSenshi Outfits, All but Mint looking horrified, Alex screaming "WHAT THE HELL?!"

End Issue 1 Main Part

A few revisions. We mght be changing some of those last names

Okkie dokie, sounds good to me. =3